Stay in the shade.
where the devil has layed.
where Hell was made.
where good memories fade.
The teeth of the vampire sharp as a blade.
The light where the vampire could be slayed.
stay in the shade.
Vampire poem by me?
dark, and it rhymes, i like it
Reply:to be honest, it's simplistic, and focuses only on the rhyme. try again, adn maybe concentrate on *showing* us some vivid images...don't get hung up on the rhyme, though i know it helps sometimes.
Reply:Don't worry about the rhyming so much, poetry is more about feeling. Think of how the vampire would feel. Angst? Depression? Fear? Wistfulness? Make the emotions your own and mix them all together, Wham you have a poem :) Be sure to use description. Good luck! :)
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